Does this make sense?

tt does - and is too dense a compound sentense for the reader to absorb without effort. So you may make it enyoyable to absorb by breaking it down into 2 sentences. They do not have to be of equal length and 1 might present your main points with a more briefer 1 to support them as it`s too hard to recall compound sentences usually. And again, it makes sense, and shold be turned into good reading.Paricularly as the focus is UPON good journalism.